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Hijack

I was describing Jeremy's first impression of Alyssa before I went to take a shower. When I came back, I saw that my brother had been at my laptop, adding to my story. This is what he wrote:

She was like, to Jeromy, an ugly gargoyal-a very ugly gargoyal.
Jeromy took one look at the ugly face and said in a soft, friendly voice, “So are you going to eat those fries? Or not? Cause you know, I really need those to, like, do my homework on the history of cheese and stuff.”
The lady did the only humane thing: She captured the now over delited Jeromy, by stuffing him into a duffle bag, locked him in a closet for eight months, and for that period kept repeating, “There’s no such thing as French fries.”

Eight months later, after the police had been searching for Jeromy, he came out with a dazed look on his face, and oh his face. His face was unshaven, his eyes were blood shot, and he studdered every time someone spoke to him. He was a wreck. The day after he was found, he was put into the magical place with the people in the strait jackets and the


At that point, he heard me come out of the bathroom and ran away.
This is my 11 year old brother. Thank you and good night.

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swankyfunk
Nov. 13th, 2005 08:01 am (UTC)
Your brother rools.
metatronis
Nov. 14th, 2005 08:25 am (UTC)
Ahhhh yeeeah.
grrgoyl
Nov. 13th, 2005 08:37 am (UTC)
Heeee! But OMG they are cancelling AD. Read my new post for more details.
metatronis
Nov. 14th, 2005 08:29 am (UTC)
Oh yes, I heard about that. I told my mom and she was outraged as well.
*sigh*
Why does Fox have to suck so much? Argh.
kamikazebunny
Nov. 13th, 2005 08:55 pm (UTC)
awww christ.

i laughed my D off reading that.

go eric.
metatronis
Nov. 14th, 2005 08:30 am (UTC)
I know, he's such a freak. He also went on a chatroom I was in, and was like. "I hate you all.almost too much."
They knew it wasn't me, though.
mad_libbs
Nov. 14th, 2005 12:11 am (UTC)
damn, thats good for his age. i like it. i hope you didn't erase it, just fixed it a bit. it doesn't have to stay in your story, but it is a good bit of writing for someone so young. very creative and imaginative, even if its a bit insane. then again, sanity is overrated.

~libby
*continues to giggle profusely* (see journal for more details)
metatronis
Nov. 14th, 2005 08:31 am (UTC)
Well, one reason I posted it was so I could save it but not have it in my story. It doesn't *quite* fit with the story.

Awww, congrats on your...happy times.
pineapplegrl186
Nov. 14th, 2005 07:24 am (UTC)
"with a dazed look on his face, and oh his face. His face was unshaven, his eyes were blood shot, and he studdered every time someone spoke to him. He was a wreck."

Tom after staying up all night and drinking 2 pots of coffee. trust me, I've seen it.
metatronis
Nov. 14th, 2005 08:31 am (UTC)
Yeah, duh, okay.
cosmiccastaway3
Nov. 15th, 2005 05:53 pm (UTC)
Sincerely one of the best things that I have read. It was great, and in some strange way made sense. He is very descripitve and has an excellect vocabulary. Definately can see your influence in his writing. Awwww so cute.
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